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I think it's a curious way to view a person (or that's what I'm assuming) as an it. It kind of makes it almost seem as if they are nothing. But maybe that's the point. It seems like maybe "it" didn't want help either, with the whole don't try it won't smile thing. I found this to be a curious piece. Quite sad too. I'd suggest maybe going into more depth about it? And how it was feeling? (Hey sorry it's a critique so suggestions are open) overall I liked it.
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DESTRUCTION-BUNNY Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I couldn't go moe in depth with the poem...
But if you kindly ask me, I'll tell you my thoughts about "it" (:
Also, thank you very much for the critique!
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